Monday, 16 May 2011


Below is my very first attempt at writing a sonnet. After completing the poem I was convinced it was a pretty average piece of poetry but, after some encouraging & supportive comments from my twitter chums, I've decided to offer it up for comments on my main blog page.

It is a Shakespearean sonnet written in iambic pentameter & the rhyming scheme is: a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, e-f-e-f, g-g

In Greek Mythology, Merope was one of the seven Pleiades. Astronomically, she is one of the seven sisters in the star cluster Pleiades in the constellation of Taurus.

I believe the correct pronounciation of Merope is 'Me-ro-pee'.


When I behold the silver crusted sky
you turn away, too shamed to meet my gaze.
Oh Merope, I bid thee do not cry -
What kindles your sidereal malaise?
Is it Orion’s chase that makes thee weep?
Did marrying a mortal bring you shame?
Each night before Erebus fosters sleep
I seek the wellhead whence your sorrow came.
Amidst the navy cloth of night you gleam,
A glowing sapphire stitched on heaven’s cloak.
Yet pulchritude does not beget esteem -
Your heart lies scorched ‘midst clouds of stellar smoke.
Switch off your starry light and let me be
your constellation for eternity.


  1. The way you painted these images with metaphors and mythology, negotiating the human essence that really matters in a material Universe. I love this poem! I have a particular affinity to Shakespearean sonnets, to Greek mythology, and a great fascination for celestial objects and to have a poet like you writing about all this, is nectar to my soul. Thank you, Peter. Q x

  2. This is beautiful Peter..woven together with gorgeous language..I love it! x

  3. Quirina ~ such incredible comments. Thank you so much. I too have an affinity with those three things. I had decided on a celestial subject & decided to explore the constellations to find her. Of the Pleiades, Merope's 'story' was the saddest so I chose her. Again, sincere thanks for all your encouraging & supportive comments.

  4. Hi Louise ~ thank you sincerely for your lovely comments. So pleased that you like my sonnet. I truly did have doubts about it at first.

  5. Peter,

    A wonderful and beautiful sonnet! That it is your first makes it all the more so :)

    I have yet again expanded my knowledge in looking up the words you incorporate within your poetry.

    Thankyou for writing and sharing this.

    Abi x

  6. The stars will smile at you, Peter, now that they know your love and attention to there existence

  7. Hi Abi ~ thank you for your wonderful comments. It was an 'interesting' process: a mixture of intense frustration when I couldn't find the words to rhyme or fit the rhythm ... & then exhilaration when a piece of the sonnet came together.

  8. Hi Edjo ~ thank you so much for reading 'Merope' & for your lovely comment. I hope they do ... & I hope they smile on you too.

  9. Love this line Peter "Amidst the navy cloth of night you gleam" - I used something similar in one of my poems describing the dark of night as a "... nocturnal cloak ..." ~ no doubts Peter, a great sonnet ! Well done !

  10. Hi Steve ~ thanks for your lovely comments. I would love to read your sonnet ~ is there a link to it?

  11. The fun part about the first sonnet is what you think of it after you write your fifth, your tenth your fiftieth..

  12. Good point Zongrik ~ though I have to say I'm struggling to imagine reaching five, never mind fifty ...

  13. If this is your first attempt at writing a sonnet, you could have fooled me. Everything seems to fit, and I am particularly hooked by the phrase"pulchtridue does not beget esteem" that was a brave thing to say in a sonnet! Beautifully done in its entirety!

  14. Thank you so much for your extremely positive & encouraging comments, Jacquie. Very much appreciated.